【雅思】2019暑假專題 | 雅思真題中考官范文的使用

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很多人一說到雅思作文備考,就會想到背雅思范文。每次我聽到覺得蠻搞笑的,有背范文那個功夫,還考不好作文?更何況,背完作文就真的一定能領悟到雅思考官的精髓嗎?

下面,我們就以一篇考官范文為例,帶你深度剖析雅思作文的高分之道。

選自劍橋雅思真題集 C8 - T1

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members ofsociety.Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discussboth these views and give your own opinion.

首先進入到文章的開頭段:

Achild’s education has never been about learning information and basic skills only.(1) It has always included teaching the next generation howto be good members of society.(2)Therefore, this cannot be the responsibilityof the  parents alone. (3)

我們可以看到,本段雖然無生詞:但文章中第一句話用“never”及“only”,最后一句用“not”及“alone”,考官都運用了雙重否定表肯定,從而增強句子語氣。

同時第二句中的 the next generation 也符合less common vocabulary,增加了詞語表達的豐富性。

接下來我們進入到文章的主體段1:

Inorder to be a good member of any society the individual must respect and obeythe rules of their community and share their values.(1) Educating children to understand the need to obey rules and respect others always begins inthe home and is widely thought to be the responsibility of parents.(2) Theywill  certainly be the first to help children learn what is important inlife, how  they are expected to behave and what role they will play intheir world. (3)

首先來看句1和句2,運用了特殊開頭詞的寫作形式:“inorder to ”(介詞短語放句首)及“Educating”(動名詞放句首)。大部分童鞋寫句子時,名詞代詞放句首的偏多, 特殊開頭詞引出句子的方法,可以嘗試 ~

再來看句子中的 respect and obey 這組, 及what...how... andwhat 這組,兩組都屬于平行結構,一組是短語平行, 一組是從句平行。 三個從句寫出來, 不僅句子長度拉長,同時還展示了書寫從句能力!

最后來看句子2的謂語, 共有兩個, 分別為begin 及 be widely thought ,一主動一被動,這又何嘗不是增加句子靈活度的方式?

然后是文章的主體段2:

However,learning to understand and share the value system of a whole  societycannot be achieved just in the home.(1) Once a child goes to school,  theyare entering a wider community where teachers and peers will have just as muchinfluence as their parents do at home. (2)At school, children will experienceworking and living with people from a whole variety of backgrounds from thewider society. (3)This experience should teach them how to cooperate with eachother and how to contribute to the life of their community. (4)

句1, 一方面雙重否定表肯定了 not 及just用法,同時還起到了承上啟下的作用,起到對學校教育的論述。

句2, once及where引導兩個從句做嵌套,句子雖長,但論述邏輯清晰。段落的句尾再次出現平行結構, 也是為了和上段做呼應。

Butto be a valuable member of any community is not like learning a simple skill.It is something that an individual goes on learning throughout life and it isthe responsibility of every member of a society to take responsibility for helpingthe younger generation to become active and able members of that society.

最后的結尾段, 往往要給出觀點及看法,這里我們看到考官在給觀點時用到了這樣一個短語“active and able”。大部分人看到后沒有任何感覺, 但他實際用的是押頭韻的用法。

和其相似的還有,Beauty and the Beast, League of Legend 以及Pride and Prejudice等等。只要留心,這種在電影及雜志上的材料,不妨細心積累,放入你的作文庫中。

這就是C8T1的范文,對大部分人來說,這篇材料是沒有生詞的。但考官就是用了雙重否定表肯定、特殊開頭詞、平行結構及押頭韻等等表達了多樣的句式!

所以我們看出,真正好的作文不是生詞長句,像考官材料一樣,用簡單詞表達多樣的句式,也同樣能幫你拿到作文高分哦!

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